The Message

He he... I like the ending.

A couple of things I'd like to adress though:

1. How old is your character?

2. The 'Ebon Hawk' was the name of one specific freighter. It wasn't a class of ship. I say this because I know some people get ancy when someone uses cannon in their story. I'd suggest looking up the class of ship the Ebon Hawk was and nameing it to fit you better.

(Remember, it's just constructive critisizm. )

Good story otherwise...

Oh and I like the pics you put at the start of each chapter.

Maral Dimor wrote:

and note im not in the ebon hawk its just a freighter. Im 10 right now and yes people get pissed when people put Ebon Hawk in their story but whatever ill think about just putting the class instead .

"I was born on March 13 1233 BTC in Tatoonie."

^ Was why I was asking the age. I took 1233 BTC to be 1233 years Before Treaty of Coruscaunt. Then the title of the thread said BTC 25. I might just not understand the time format you used.

And... I know you aren't on the 'Ebon Hawk.' You were just using it as a reference to the freighter type. I was simply stating that I know others might frown upon it. I discovered this through personal experience. If you don't want to, don't. It's all just advice.